(please ignore the typographical error lol)

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    1 month ago

    thanks, this is my first jab at writing a poem, glad you liked it. honestly I kinda regret producing something so jaded and angry but yknow I wrote it and posted it so it’s kinda a done deal

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      1 month ago

      It’s really good, the main theme I’m getting from it is loneliness and strong urge for companionship which is something a lot of people can relate to. But that’s only how it starts.

      It goes from a settling-down mentality, to the speaker ignoring their own needs as a “sacrifice” for the other person, then asking for very big commitments, and finally resulting in that spiritual vore of the other person because of the real one-sided dependency.

      The main takeaway I’m getting from it (i.e. the meaning I’m choosing to project so, you know, it’s just an opinion) is that it’s a warning not to force one’s self into relationship out of loneliness.

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        1 month ago

        I really appreciate your analysis! I didn’t have any specific moral-of-the-story in mind when writing this, but I can definitely see how you could take it as a warning. I wrote this groggy as shit with the nightmare still in my head so your interpretation is as good as mine haha. Maybe it is a warning from my subconscious or something like that. I am constantly having these nightmares about loneliness, co-dependence, sacrifice, etc and I thought writing about it would help me process it. Time will tell

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          Definitely writing it down helps with processing thoughts. I’ve been writing down any ideas in my head (99% of which are crap which is expected) so I’m not constantly thinking about them.

          It exorcises the demons.